Kia ora, we are from Punui-O-Toka at South Hornby School. We really like how you retold the story and how well you described what you were doing. Your writing reminded us of when people have to come to our school to perform. We thought to improve your writing you could use a bigger variety sequencing words like then, after and next. What does the dumpling dance look like?
Kia ora, we are from Punui-O-Toka at South Hornby School. We really like how you retold the story and how well you described what you were doing. Your writing reminded us of when people have to come to our school to perform. We thought to improve your writing you could use a bigger variety sequencing words like then, after and next. What does the dumpling dance look like?
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